The imagery was superb. The metaphor between the rain of a thunderstorm and tears was also incredible. I feel as if I knew the kind of pain you experienced just from the way you worded your poem. The only negative to the poem is that the rhythm was a bit jumpy. If you meant it to be then you can disregard the upcoming advice. To help non-rhythmical poems flow better try using punctuation to control the rhythm. Also specifically selecting certain line lengths and numbers of syllables and stresses can play a role in how a poem flows. Other than that I can't point out any flaws. Great write.

How very beautiful Azzza....I think you are becoming a better poet with every verse you write:)

Very alluring imagery in this one. I have no doubt you have a big chance to win the contest, it was lovely, lovely*grins*

* big hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

"Sun shining morning
eclipse by gloomy weather
Sounds of thunder protest
against heaven's silence"
^ I thought the opening stanza wasn't very original, good one but not the best to the poem.

"Million silver driblets
crashing to the ground
Billions more await,
to share the same fate"
^I don't know, I don't like this stanza, it went a bit trite, heard it several times with the difference in wording. and the rhyme went a little bit off.

"Crippled of divine powers
to reverse the hands of clock
memories dives into a mental block"
^Great imagery here :) especially with the last two lines..though I think you meant "driven" not "drives" ?

"your presence still lingers..."
^This line fits the poem perfectly..I love it, though I've hear it before..in your poem it gave a special meaning.

I liked the ending :) it was good, though I believe this isn't the best you've written.
Your title was repeated..must you use this one??

Anyhow..great try dear friend :)
Write on~

Sorry I meant "dive" not "dives". can't believe I read it "drives" lol

Wow! Good job!...i like this..5/5

Sun shining morning
eclipse by gloomy weather
Sounds of thunder protest
against heaven's silence
^^The first line was a bit confusing not coz of the contents or something but i think you missed a comma somewhere there...I dunno if it should read as below then probably the comma should be like:
"Sun shining, morning
eclipse by gloomy weather

your presence still lingers...
^^Simple words yet filled of deep emotions..

O pristine green pearl
forever laid hidden by closed shell
Alluring beauty forbidden to be seen;
cast by an oceanic spell
^^This was a beautiful ending and even the best stanza among all however i dont think this lines should be the ending...Your poem revolved and started about you and i seriously think that, if you ended it about how hurt or how you were less found instead of her, if you know what i mean...and then these lines could be somewhere in the middle and with a little more of elaboration about her..These were just my opinions and not to be taken seriously...

Overall, This was a powerful piece to me..

An AMAAAAAAAAAAZING piece
The tittle really attracted my attention
keep up the good work :)

Wow, this was amazing, loved the different word choices and the way they poem fit together, the imagery you used was excellent
5/5

Absolutely incredible! I love it! The imagery is wonderfully constructed. I honestly cannot give any criticism on it. Well done!

This is a really good poem. i love when people use metaphors.

Million silver driblets
crashing to the ground
Billions more await,
to share the same fate

personally this was my favorite stanza. it made mme think of this time i was in an open field watching a meteor shower.

this poem is very well written. great job. :)

Alluring and creative use of metaphor. Well done!

Alluring and creative use of metaphor. Well done!

I loved this. and especially this part "Piercing through a canvas
of crystalline blue
Stabbing in the center
of an open wound
it's now tainted
in crimson hue"

it's truly beautiful!!

would you please give me your feedback on the last two poems i wrote? it would mean a lot.