Now this is dark and i really loved this form. Few words could say so much and spl when potrayed so beautifully. Amazing poem dear.

all the best and take care

Cindy, everytime I read this I get goose bumps. I can see death just lurking as you described. Well done with the form.

Love the form as well as the topic you have
chosen to write. It gives a creepy feel..well
done!

Cindy,

This is absolutely fantastic..

Technically, it is perfect. (to my eyes anyway)
Three verse, telling a sad tale of death.

1st verse - I see a bed, a hospital bed maybe with a dying person in it? I rather like to think that they have been allowed out, so that they can die at home and around loved ones.
In a chair is the lone loved one. They have waited up, watching over, waiting for the inevitable, memories flooding through their mind from happier/ healthier times. The tears are so full of pain and so unstoppable that eyes bleed their pain too. A last cry, a cry that no one wanted to hear, but knew it would come anyway.

2nd verse - Here is the darkness, the angel of death has arrived at waiting for the last cry. His job begins once it is heard, taking back the once mortal souls. I see his deathly, fearsome shadow hovering over the bed, reaching to claim back what will soon no longer be needed.

3rd verse - This makes me feel like this death is from a disease - a terminal one. This makes it dark indeed. A life robbed by the devil curse. I see this angel now, a demon, a servant of the devil; moving in to steal away from the innocent.

Cindy, this is amazingly good. I am in awe and have only praise for this poem.

Well done.

Michael

This is dark indeed. I like that you added a description of the form at the end. It is helpful to those who aren't familiar with it to know what rules you were adhering to. Nice job.

Sad and dark! That's what you need to make it gripping! :) Excellent one!

No challenge too big, no form or style escapes your tallented mind.
To me you've described one's final moment of existence in a dark yet beautiful way.
Keep up the great work my friend.
Paul...

Very sad indeed. So much were sad in so few words. I came across your poem since recently and i admire your writing talent and styles. Very well done, 5/5, kel.

A very dark musette, but you mastered this form. You are truly a talent poetess, this piece was so captivating and in such few words you have said so much. A wonderful poem to read, kept me at the edge of my seat. 5/5 from me, keep writing, always and forever..

God Bless You!

~MaryAnne

An accomplished piece of formed poetry, Cindy, with wonderful imagery created for me as I prepare to go to bed! :(
No, in seriousness, this is a wonderful write and shows again how well you adapt to the different forms.
All the best and I hope you are well,
Ben