One More Day

You have great metaphors here, and not so much as to overuse it, though just that little bit that makes me want you to add more and yet makes the image clearer. This was a well written poem, portrayed something simply and yet with a bit of mystic in your words, something to help us invision it well, and make us wonder what they mean.

I like not only the message, but the way you presented it. I felt that it was really something that I could read and relate to, it's sometimes hard to do that.

what will really drive you insane is if you don't stop thinking about it. You honestly don't miss the person, but you miss the way that they made you feel. I'm sure that you sit down and think about it a lot.

either way back to the poem. It was well done and I think that it's one of the few that I can relate with, it also didn't rthyme which was a surprise.

keep your chin up kid, sometimes life throws you a curveball, other times it throws you an out of the park pitch.