by Dark Savior
I like not only the message, but the way you presented it. I felt that it was really something that I could read and relate to, it's sometimes hard to do that. |
You have great metaphors here, and not so much as to overuse it, though just that little bit that makes me want you to add more and yet makes the image clearer. This was a well written poem, portrayed something simply and yet with a bit of mystic in your words, something to help us invision it well, and make us wonder what they mean. |