Whispery goodbye

A very simple yet strong style of poetry, The imagery used is also very good there are som suggestions i will make however (of course you dont have to use them though your work is very good as it is)

Silence soft breeze
Harsh whispers freeze

Eternal love above the clouds
Senesless flesh falls to the ground

Death's cold touch
My soul withers in it's clutch

A child's hope within extended hands
Their inoccent smile taken in which death demands

A peek appears upon your face
Spiritless goodbye there is no grace

You have such a creative way of writing. I really enjoyed reading this. The style was simple, but each sentence carries it's own powerful emotion. I love the imagery as well. Very nice work. Nik