Don't worry -- I'll carry your weight too. I'm not scared...

I like your title. It reminds me of a Panic At The Disco song title. Very clever. I love the way this is written it's like a letter almost. Saying goodbye at the end was the perfect way to end this. You have such an amazing talent. Keep it up. Nik

Your title could definatly be shortened quite a bit cause with such a long title you could possibly be giving away the whole message of the poem, and you dont really want that.. do you?

Anyways, this poem overall was okay. I thought the emotions definatly came out clearly and the reader could tell where you were coming from. I didnt necessarily like how there was a lot of repetition with the beginning of some lines, but other than that, this poem is set aside from many poems, cause it in a way sounds like a rap or a song almost.. not sure.. but something is unique about it.

Good job -

Temps. [Beyond a Poets Mind]

Oh my goshh. Reading this piece felt like reading my life. This is like a mixture of how my boyfriend and I are feeling, and kind of what we're going through. Like, I don't know how to explain it, but I can relate really well. And this really hits me in the heartt. (: Powerful and captivating write. 5/5.