Comments : Division

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Tears of insanity
    Smiles full of wickedness
    A soul that fights with the heart
    A mind overwhelmed and lost

    * I really like this. The words you use or perfect and make me want to keep reading. I love the imagery as well*

    The path is divided
    I divide
    Searching
    Willing life to happen

    *Nice change in syntax. I think it's very interestig*

    Show its multi-sided face
    To eyes who refuse to look
    Unable to bear the reflection
    Of truth

    *This is a very deep poem and it evokes thoughts from the reader. Very nice imagery and strong diction. Nice work. Nik*