Is this like some specific form? I loved it dont get me wrong, but if its a strict form then perhaps a different form would be a better choice, cause I really wanted to read more, you hook the reader then leave them wanting more.. which isnt really a good thing in my opinion. This was short but for what it is I thought you did a great job, what a feeling this is, that are felt by man y of us. When we look into the eyes of someone and instantly get lost, and we drift off to a fantasy world.. I would almost like to know personally the feelings, emotion involved.. without making it cliche.

Temps. [ Beyond a Poets MInd ]

Very interesting, I see a lot of poems posted in this style but nowhere near as thought provoking or as beautifully worded =] I diddnt expect to see a poem like this from you and I have to say I am really impressed you can portray your thoughts into so many different styles! Amazing job