by xbrokinxlillxgirlx May 27, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
I look around.. |
There were some grammer errors here. This poem has a lot of simple meanings, spelling out simple words, and yet was very long and this took away from it. Most poems in this style aim to be short and sweet because it's strong and powerful words can still only captivate the audience for so long. This was a fair write. But can still be improved. |