I loved this, Kel.

overwhelmed with ardent embraces.

^^
This was the only flaw I could find, 9 syllables in this line, if I counted correctly. You could replace ardent by fierce to correct it and overerwhelmed by fierce embraces sounds better to me:)

I think you made a very passionate, sensual verse..something tells me your hubbie is a lucky devil *grins*

Je t'embrasse,

5/5 Ingrid

This is to me a very well written Retourne
"A single body with for legs" is I believe a simple typo you may want to edit in the first line of the second quatrain
A single body with four legs

I love it

Well done. A body with four legs, an image I see when I watch two people dancing the tango. I have often thought of love as dance and the tango would be the perfect dance to express love. Good job.

I'm glad to see that you challenged yourself to a different style and that you really liked to do it, you made it seem like you do this all the time.

That being said, this is sort of a strange subject to choose to have it picked. I did enjoy the poem, but it's really strange.

I think that this poem is really nice and very well done. I liked the format which really helped. I also like the description, you made it sensual but not too sexual to be in the love section.

5/5

Kelley
you did a wonderful job on this form....the imagery you created with your words is awesome.
Take Care
Cindy

I really dont think i came across this form before. Its beautiful and i just loved the way you played with words creating a beautiful picture in reader's mind.

all the best and take care

Nice imagery and the stanzas are very well structured. A well penned sensual write!

Exquisite, Enjoyed Kel. Wonderful Retourne!!!

Kelleyanna,
I loved this poem. You have managed to pen a very elegant form and held to the subject very well. I loved where this poem took me. The feeling of dancing and how it combines trust and love of the dance together, in order to pull off a beautiful togetherness. Exquisite write dear and I am truly delighted to have read it.
Great Job,
Take Care,
Kay

Really nice poem.i'll give u 5/5
keep the good work!

I m sure you must be surprised to see me commenting... Well, my mind gets attracted once I find a mindblowing poem. You did a great job kel. The visualisation is simply superb. I hardly found any flaws in this retourne. Keep writing and the day is not far when you will find yourself on the homepage of this site.

Regards,
Bugs

Gifted & knowledgeable. "A single body with four legs" "Total trust through connection" feelings felt without words. You sure can write a piece of poetry!