Wow...this is amazing. I love rich with emotions it is and how clearly you express your feelings. I love the diction..blew my mind. Very nice work. Let me know when you post more, I'd love to read them. Nik

Well-expressed emotions and you wrote a brilliant write. My only suggestion is to capitalize all your "i"s, its just proper grammar. Otherwise, a very breathtaking piece, every line was worded wonderful and kept the reader reading. You will write great poems like this later on, I am sure of it. Take care and God Bless You!