In this poem you seemed almost confined to your wanting to write in a four stanza style. It began wonderfully, although after you seemed to chop up your thoughts.

"Stare into my soul
And to my sins, you call"

^This almost seems like an incomplete thought, it would be much better if you had forgotten the pattern you were trying to follow and just coninuted onwards.

Your poetry has a great flow, though here as if as a sacrifice incomplete thought seemed to have surfaced.

"Mirror, mirror
on my wall
Cut me slow
& watch me fall!"

^I really liked the ending in this except for the exclamation mark at the end. If you had had a period, the thought would have been more monotone. Sad. Low key even. But you placed an exclamation mark which said you screamed it. Excitedly? It makes me imagine this as if you throw your arms up in the air after writing this, and just fall of your bed or chair. Whatever you were working to show through that, it hadn't really made a mark. Your choice of punctuation in poetry is very important. Especially you can't be in front of the person yet you still have to portray what you mean. 3.5/5