Seclusion

"Emptiness haunts my looming soul,
I can only suffer so much more,
Drained - this hole won't fill,
I've been here many times before,"

A truly flawless opening, this stanza caught my attention and held it there, your descriptions helped me understand what was going on. Your word choice was so unique, "looming" was such a great word to describe "soul". You clearly expressed your feelings in a dark way, if that makes sense.

"Anger taunts my depressed mind,
Teasing me to have a better life,
Blind - too much hate to see,
Fear tells me to drop the knife,"

"taunts" and "teasing" what excellent words that fit perfectly into this poem. Each line is very captivating and has me wondering what will happen.

"Why won't these walls break?
My blood won't suffice for this,
Is there anything I can take?
My smothered heart wants to quit,"

Great questions tagged on, I love when poets use those, they really make the reader think and it adds a lot to the poem.

Don't quit, stay strong, things will get better.

"Why don't I understand I'm alone?
My tears won't make up for this,
Is this how to refuse what I own?
My misled promises are fading..."

Entrancing wording I must say, its been so long since I read one of your poems, but I missed them. Your descriptions are breathtaking and you expressed all you were feeling well.

"In the end - one moment is left,
[Shaking] my body is failing,
Steal my life - it's not theft,
[Denial] it was nothing anyway..."

Throughout this piece I found each line to be so eye-catching, as you never bored me. That takes some talent, and you wowed me with this last stanza. This deserves to win front page, seriously, your unique wording haunted me and made me feel like I wanted to help you somehow.

5/5 from me, take care and God Bless.

~MaryAnne