Reversible Heart.

I must give you kudos, this was a very different concept. And I adored the idea.

First off, the title was quite eye catching.
It gives off the impression of a love poem and yet is placed in misc. which makes the reader intrigued. Well it intrigued me anyway.

"What if the heart was reversible?"
`Bit of a strange question, obviously rhetorical but still..something about it made it stand out. Its not really a question, more of a statment to me. In my opinion, the question mark would fit better after "right-side in". Makes more sense.

"inside-out, or right-side in."
`I loved this, its like a candy covered tongue twister, and yet holds something poetic about it. Well done there.

"Each individual soul unique,"
`I didn't really get this part, I must say.
Its like you meant "Each individual soul[s]/[is] unique," especially as you followed it with "created by your own choices."
Still- I did like the idea of unique souls reflecting on unique hearts etc. Nice one.

"Scars of the past cured
with a single dose of
'i love you' from a lover."
`The started of this stanza was so strong that I think the above weakens it. Maybe try a metaphor of some kind to keep the strength. Or even just re over it a few times and pick out where it weakens etc and try rephrase it?

"What if YOUR heart was reversible?"
`I loved the ending. On the page, it looks a bit odd which makes it stand out more.
I don't think theres a need for YOUR to be in caps, its strong enough. Maybe but the Y in caps, just to show the importance? I dunno.
But excellent way to end a poem, the way you opened it with a little extra spice.

Over all I really enjoyed the idea,
and the poem was written nicely. (:
Excellent job!

I like the whole concept of this piece, you are so creative in all your writes! This was very thought-provoking and gave the reader many things to think about. The imagery held my attention and kept me reading, which also made this poem very enjoyable to read. Great work, you did a terrific job!

~MaryAnne

Temps, you did a really great job with this poem and the rhyme and flow was really good. The imagery is what was really good in this poem. The image you make with your words are really great. The text itself in this poem was pretty interesting too considering that it is possible and that people do just take others hearts away and just uses them. Good job.

Temps:)

I am not sure if I understand what you are saying here..
In a way our heart always changes, due to time and things that happen around us. It's important to always stay true to yourself and in touch with your inner voice and not to put on an act. Indeed we keep secrets inside our hearts as we grow older, things that happened in our lives that are too painful or private to share/ bare and we carry those like a cross.
They say that people who have Down's syndrom are happier than us, the "normal"people because they have less awareness and ability to recollect and internalize things..after having lived for over 40 years in this cruel and heartless world I tend to agree. I often wish my heart/ mind were free of all the things I have gathered througout my existence.

I like this poem, it will make people think:)

*hugs*

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