This was a very, very good poem though it wasn't in an outline form it was still a good poem. The flow of the poem was descent and so was the rhyming. The emotion you put in this poem though was really good and can be felt by the reader. This was overall a great poem. Good job.

This was an amazing read.
You have portraied and great piece of imagary here,
the flow and structure both worked brilliantly, i could read this over and over, and each time see the beauty of the picture.

Well done