Comments : Saving Innocence.

  • 15 years ago

    by Gabba Gabba Hey

    I like the very last line of this poem the best. I'm not entirely sure what you're going for here, I mean, I have my theories, but it's not too clear. Which can be great, because it makes me think ^_^
    It looks to me like this needs to be proof read (and so do half of my poems XD) sometimes you need someone else to notice things like that.
    For instance, I believe that 'where lie' should be 'where the lie(s)' or 'where lying'
    I dunno!
    This is a good concept for a write though ^_^