Comments : The Bird

  • 15 years ago

    by The Queen

    That was beautiful...I liked how you describe yourself as a bird, and as how young and innocent you are..But as i read further I realized that it was a sad one especially when you mentioned the relationship between you and your mother...I'll give you another 4 for that as i think, there are some minor lines to be fixed however it is just my opinion and not to be taken in a wrong way..