Comments : The Past Remains when the Storm has Run

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    There are way too many filler words in this piece, especially THE. You should try to make the most of each word in poetry. Not to say you can never say the but 29 times is definetly overkill. The rhyming is forced as well.

  • 15 years ago

    by PoetryKnight

    Wicked awsome, bro. i was like dude, and then i was like no way, but then i was like alright. u know what I mean.