by Lu
Neeeeeee I loved your poem !!!! |
by Sylvia
I see two minor things that I would recommend changing. |
"A mug lies before you |
by Nee
No temps :) I meant "revel" as in "take pleasure" |
by The Prince
Well written Nema, the metaphor was uniquely picked. Thought the narration was fitting and the tone was consistent: |
by Nonz
A mug lies before you |
by HvN
Beautiful! |
by ether
Nice work Nema! My only complaint would be the title. Sad, sad. |
by Faithless
OMG Nema... I can see why you won. This poem is absolutely brilliant. I like how you express coffee flavored with liquid pain and how a pen cries... I mean those 2 expression totally blown me away. I'm proud to see you progress to be an excellent writer day by day;) |
by dora
Great work again as always. u know how to captivate the reader from start to end! 5/5 of course!! |
by Yuuki
Wow great poem, its perfectly written ur emotions are very clear great job |