We've All Had Our Enemies, We're Leaving The Past Behind
by Brittany Jun 3, 2009
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I can't breathe |
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15 years agoby mandy
Very touching. The emotions were amazing. I liked how you formed the stanzas. I think it was very creative and it helps the flow, which was very steady throughout the poem. Some things though.
"The poems that I wrote will cut you like a knife."
-Very effective, but it's a little ordinary. Try making your own metaphors, it gives the reader a sense of who you are and a much better understanding of how you're feeling in the poem.
Besides that, I thought the poem was brilliant. Great job, keep on writing. 5/5!
-mandy :)
