"Come with me, it will be okay
I know your heart has gone astray."
Excellent reassuring opening that is a great opening for the reader to read.
"I will always hold you tight,
in your darkness & your fright."
"&" should be "and".
"I want to know all about you,
Remember - I have paid my dues.
When the pain is too much & you just want to die,
I understand why you do not cry."
Again "&" should be "and". Good emotions expressed here.
"When the pain & the hurt is too much to bear,
I see your cuts - your soul laid bare.
I know that your pain goes down to the bone,
but remember - you are not on this journey alone. "
This is so nice of you, you are there for that person and will guide them through life, be their friend through it all. Nicely said and well-penned.
5/5 from me, take care and God Bless!
~MaryAnne
15 years ago
by He is the Reason
That was a wonderfully written poem, the wording and emotions were deep and made the reader become immersed in the flow of the feelings. Short, good and well felt