Whoa. intense. it's short and to the point. you really got your message across. and as dark and sad as it is i totally love it. very beautiful in a depressed way. 5/5.

Wow...I loved this. It's short and straight to the point. I felt like you covered all of the pain you were feeling without going to far. I love the imagery and the loose syntax you use as well. Keep it up babe. Nik

A short poem but its sad and deep to.... i like poem...... 5/5 for this poem....