Good job with the shape of a tree. It could be a sad poem as well. I get the meaning that the tree is cut down with a chain saw (grinding teeth). You gave a voice to the tree and did it well.

Another unique one coming from you.
Very nicely presented by you and as always great selection of words.

all the best and take care

We can't (as readers) make the shape of the poem please us if the content isn't too good though.
I was confused at the first bit as you mentioned the first line (which I thought was subjective) was a dream? This undermines the proceedings and is unneeded. Minor typo on metallic by the way.
'Breezy shade' was a clumsy construction and I wasn't keen on 'ungratefulness personified', I am positive there is a way you can deliver this a lot better than you did. The abundance of '!' seemed like filler too.
I liked the idea behind this though it's still a poem and some of the awkward phrases are a bit disquieting. 'Couldn't save you from greed' is an example, since I don't know how 'greed' fits into this. 'His demands' was too vague for me too.

Neat effort and the idea almost worked, I just think the weakness in this poem lies in the sentence constructions. Easily fixed though, it has potential.

Seems you like to write this type of poetry. It's a very unique form. I liked the words you've used and the structure of the lines. I'm not a great critique. I just enjoyed what you've written! Nice work!

Firstly, i have to applaud you for such a unique structure. (Inspired me to make one too..:))

Breath is slowly
....fading, no longer will I stand....
^^However, i think these lines were contradicting to the image this poem was portraying..I find these lines simple for a great poem...

bid....me
^^Also, I dont think the dots were good to look at..After the word "bid", dots were signifying a long pause which was a little odd for the sentence...

Overall, I loved this piece, very creative..Im going to consider this style in the future...

And thanks for the time you took to read my stuff...:)