About the structure, I found it prefect. Although your poem only gave the readers hints on what had happened, i assumed it was hard on your part to be specific. Probably cause of the pain that went and going though. I have noticed as well that most of your poems are all about sadness and anger. I hope and pray the best for you.

I think it's very unique from the rest of the "depressing" poems. It has a different/special touch that made it very enjoyable to read. The language used is very emotive..I really liked it. :)

I like the style. The use of short sentences makes me feel like you are shouting. Very effective. I love how pure the emotions are. Nothing seems forced. Very nice work. Nik

Great poem. full of emotions n i like the diff structure!!!

Very bland and unoriginal. Emotion is stale. Flow is all over the place, as well as punctuation.

Peace and prosperity,

(RKD)

This poem has a unique style and is also filled with emotion. The way everything was portrayed was excellent. Very nice write.

I like the short sentances, it made it easy to read. It flowed together really well, and the emotion in this was awesome... great job!