Wow... Tht was really realaly good. I can really feel ur pain. U can also feel disapointment with "what have you done" but then u feel the saddness and hurt of wen he left. :( srrry for ur loss 5/5

The ending really gave me chills, a quick read but the sadness starts pretty low and really builds up towards the end. You did a good job with this.. the reader feels the authors pain.

5/5.

Temps
Beyond a Poets MInd.

Wow.........