by Courageous Dreamer Jun 7, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Sheets of rain fall from the colorless sky, |
This poem is excellent |
"Sheets of rain fall from the colorless sky, |
by The Prince
Title was a bit long and unneeded, you could have chosen something a bit more welcoming. Why did you write this in third person? I think it's weaker due to that because in a poem like this, you're narrating as if the third person is the first person, just in how you're phrasing it. It's off putting. |
by Mr. Darcy
Gloomy Days and Miss You Moments |
by Sylvia
Missing someone you care about does cause gloomy days. We can think of so many things to say if we had the chance but sometimes those words are better left unspoken. Well done. |