by DreamingOutLoud Jun 8, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
The sun is shining but its rays cannot touch the wires of my heart |
by clevername
Extremely relatable and well written. i really enjoyed. one thing id consider for future poetry is don't force yourself to rhyme. if you make yourself stick with a pattern or a rhyme it can hold you back from really expressing exactly what your trying to say. for me it creates limitations and thats not what i'd ever want in poetry. sometimes though rhyme does come across very natural and happens without effort. i suspect thats what happened when you wrote this poem. I enjoyed it very much. great job! |
by Sharr
Great work. |
by No1ButMe
I loved this poem. I could relate a lot and the imagery was excellent. Keep up the good work. 5/5 |
by Jay Perry Jr
Thank you for commenting my poems :) |
by Julie
Powerful. lol. what else can be said? good job. =] |