Fallen

by End Of Eternity   Jun 8, 2009


Lush garden behind the church
Moonlight ensures every move made
Echoing thoughts of consequences
Once again the voice within fades

Memories wrapped in needles
Like my golden wedding ring
Box with collection of tears
Safely in hands of suffering

Surrendering religion with shame
Digging deep as if for treasure
Hiding my thoughts down below
Falling in the name of pleasure

Serpents won't starve tonight
As its time to wait for rain
Nightmares don't come to dead
Finally church consumes my pain

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  • 15 years ago

    by Ariana

    I think I may have read this piece in a different way than was intended which, I think it good because it is ambiguous and not so blatant. I particularly like the word choice, that you have used 'common' language/words and worked to entwine them to create a poetic piece.

  • 15 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    A deep poem, lol. To me the imagery and choice of words really conveyed a deep sadness within the heart of this poem. A powerful write.

  • 15 years ago

    by shobhana kumar

    Wow, Nitin

    this is deep, very deep in meaning and you have drawn wonderful parallels. well done!!

  • 15 years ago

    by shobhana kumar

    Wow, Nitin

    this is deep, very deep in meaning and you have drawn wonderful parallels

  • 15 years ago

    by Sourav

    Seems you've written a my kind of poem! :)
    Well, I enjoyed it so much! We keep falling in the name of pleasure. It's so true! I really wonder how long we will be?

    Surrendering religion with shame
    Digging deep as if for treasure
    Hiding my thoughts down below
    Falling in the name of pleasure

    Wonderful stanza! Loved it! Fantastic poem!

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