Nitin
What a dark intense write. The imagery is great and so are your word choices.

Lush garden behind the church
Moonlight ensures every move made
Echoing thoughts of consequences
Once again the voice within fades

The setting here is spine chilling. The darkness and the moonlight shining down bringing a eerie glow on things.

Memories wrapped in needles
Like my golden wedding ring
Box with collection of tears
Safely in hands of suffering

This is such a sad stanza. Like the vows you said mean nothing anynore. Just pain and heartache now closed in a little box.

Surrendering religion with shame
Digging deep as if for treasure
Hiding my thoughts down below
Falling in the name of pleasure

You have really painted a picture with your words for the readers mind.

Serpents won't starve tonight
As its time to wait for rain
Nightmares don't come to dead
Finally church consumes my pain

What a sad and painful end.

Excellent!
Love Cindy

Powerful and intense words you have written. I take away from this that you have lost your way from your faith. Well done.

Seems you've written a my kind of poem! :)
Well, I enjoyed it so much! We keep falling in the name of pleasure. It's so true! I really wonder how long we will be?

Surrendering religion with shame
Digging deep as if for treasure
Hiding my thoughts down below
Falling in the name of pleasure

Wonderful stanza! Loved it! Fantastic poem!

Wow, Nitin

this is deep, very deep in meaning and you have drawn wonderful parallels

Wow, Nitin

this is deep, very deep in meaning and you have drawn wonderful parallels. well done!!

A deep poem, lol. To me the imagery and choice of words really conveyed a deep sadness within the heart of this poem. A powerful write.

I think I may have read this piece in a different way than was intended which, I think it good because it is ambiguous and not so blatant. I particularly like the word choice, that you have used 'common' language/words and worked to entwine them to create a poetic piece.