Dying Love

"Whispers dying in the wind
They speak of romance once so true
When he would walk with hand in hers
And speak with Sing-song charm."

I really liked the repetition of the first line throughout the piece, that added a nice touch. Also, with the repetition of the beginning of the second line.

Also, "sing-song charm" was a very unique line, great job so far.

"Whispers dying in the wind
They speak of love once given
So even when trouble would come
He'd never give a lie."

I felt like more imagery could be added here, or at least more descriptions. But this was still good.

"Whispers dying in the wind
When love was returned by betrayal
And traitor turned to evil ways
And wrought revenge on youth."

This stanza was very well worded. "wrought" was what really caught my eye and this spoke of so much. Great meaning held here.

"Whispers dying in the wind
When traitor turned to love once given
And charmed the truth with perilous lies
That seemed so true... yet fantasy."

Loved "perilous", your vocabulary is very deep and striking. That last line really had me reading on, the usage of ".." was well done.

"Whispers dying in the wind
Of love and trust now lost
For folly turns to wisdom
Her love is no more than lies."

I feel like you used "love" so much in this poem, maybe use a synonym or re-word?

"Whispers dying in the wind
Of truth replacing fantasy
And love once give wholly
Has now succumbed to death."

Great ending, very powerful and satisfying. I loved that last line, the way it was worded got me.

Take care and God bless you!

~MaryAnne