Comments : Last Night

  • 15 years ago

    by Hopeless Romantic

    I enjoyed reading this and I enjoyed the meaning behind it as well. I would give a few grammar and spelling suggestions though. If you dont mind. :)
    "Your warm body next to mines" -drop the s on mine.
    "As we layd there i could hear" -laid not layd.
    "truth is i had realize" - a comma between is and I, and realized instead of realize.
    Another thing, I would capitalize all the I's. other than that, well written and well expressed. I enjoyed it. :)