Embracing Nature (Rispetto)

"Stapled together a cardboard dam, leaking
material once sought for mans survival.
Soaring, embracing the sky and critiquing,
an eagle searches for his human rival."

The first two lines were very descriptive and gave the reader an idea of what's happening. The third line was wonderful, I never would have before thought of an eagle critiquing. In the fourth line you clearly sum up its purpose. Nicely done so far.

"Shots escape the barrel of the mans riffle
piercing through the clouds like an airplane whiffles.
Diving, the eagle rips apart the mans dam
and grabs his moist fire roasted rack of lamb."

In the first line, I liked the idea of how "shots escape", it provides much imagery. The second line held a good simile that made the reader think. I also thought "piercing" was a perfect word to use too. In the third line, I did like how you said "diving" because that gave me such clear imagery, it just reads so well. In the last line, you end this poem with the eagle grabbing his rack of lamb. I thoroughly enjoyed all the descriptions as it helped the reader see everything in front of them. A wonderful format, thank you for teaching us about this one. 5/5 from me, take care..

~MaryAnne