Lava(Tanka)

by Jad   Jun 11, 2009


Molten red liquid,
Swirled into a vast vortex.
Melting even rocks,
Forced from tunnel to tunnel.
As it burns hot, evermore.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    A cool topic, I quite enjoyed this tanka! Wonderful wording that drew me in and held my attention, this was a great piece that perfectly described lava. 5/5 from me, keep writing!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    'As it burns hot, evermore.'
    May sound a little better rearranged like that. :]

    Otherwise awesome write.. I could feel the heat of this lava.. you really did well with your description!!

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