MaryAnne,

How about "pool of lust"? Waters is a good word, but has two syllables:)

To drown in a pool of lust is a pleasant experience btw, ha ha.

Good poem, good subject:)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Sometimes I comment to friends when I am not awake yet and make a complete fool of myself, ha ha.
Thanks for the message about the word count, indeed when it is only about words ( instead of syllables) you should stick to waters, much better:)

*hugs*

Ingrid

Some of this was a bit too cliche, like the word drowning.. but other than that an okay poem. Nothing that really 'blew me' away.. but very lovely write and great job with yet another form.

Temps. [Beyond A Poets Mind]