Wild rides and hopeless kisses

Wild Rides and Hopeless Kisses - I really think this title is too long.. I would stick to either 'Wild Rides' or 'Hopeless Kisses' .. I dont think both are necessary for a title are they?

'Awaiting the awkward ride from your house to mine,
nervousness builds up and takes control of my body.'
`I dont know what it is what I dont like 'nervousness' .. maybe use [discomfort, uneasiness, worry, sensitivity, tension] - one of those would work better here in my opinion.

'Every inch of me wants you to test my vanilla lip balm.'
`I loved how you said 'every inch of me' and not ooohhh lets day 'my lips yearn for you to taste my vanilla lip balm'

'My mind begs you to take the extraordinary plunge.'
`Loved your usage of begs here.. and not something else. 'Extraordinary plunge' was awesome.. its says a lot.

'Sucking feverishly on an Icebreakers mint,
yet all I want is to taste your breath in my mouth.'
`Very sensual and lets the reader know how strong your feelings are for this person, how bad you want them to be next to you and how you want that time with that particular person. You are quite expressive with your desires and thats beautiful.

'As you lean closer to me my stomach flips hard.
I am left with a kiss on the cheek, and you in my heart.'
`Great ending.. how all this anticipation builds up and he kisses you, maybe not the way you wanted him to kiss you but after all he's in your heart at the end.

Good write.
My only big problem was the title and its length, other than that well done.

5/5.

Wow, that was a very cute one..I liked how you ended it, you made the readers much excited then ended it abruptly in a cute way. I h ave no comments about the flow or rhyming in the poem as I myself dont follow that.

I think this poem had an odd flow
but other than that it was an enjoyable piece.
i think you expressed your self well.
good job.
:D