This moved me. The abab rhymes scheme at the first paragraph is good and fits well but from that you kinda lost the flow. The line " what way is the best, i think sounds better if it were which way it the best". Never again to commit suicide i will be geared, For my friends are always there to help me conquer my fears. Thats a personal statement i like saying to people. Suffering and pain is a part of life, once you learn how to deal with it, it ceases to be a source of your downfall but your strength.