by Michael D Nalley Jun 15, 2009
category :
Life, society /
faith, religion
In the void of light, deep in the night, my heart hoped for love. |
by DeviousCharmer
So deep, and dark. i like it . loved the words you chose. very meaningful |
by Not Enough
I like the wording you chose, it works well. It creates more emotion in the poem. Good job. |
by HidinVictim
This piece is wonderful!! The flow is flawless and its extremely touching. The imagery was perfect, like a movie in my head. Even though I'm not a religious person myself, I have to admire your faith and optimism. Also I like the format you have put this piece in, its different from what I usually read because most times I find the flow to be off, but you have done it perfectly. A truely great piece keep up the good work 5/5 |
by The Queen
A very inspiring piece. I wont go through the style, flow, rhyming etc as you already have outdone these basics..I admired the optimistic side of you, despite of all the pains, tragedy, sacrifices in this life yet you still manage to stand up with full trust in him..Good job.. |
by Jad
First of you did a great job with the poem. The imagery was really good in this poem and also your rhyming was different then most poems but for the most part you did a great job with it. The flow also was good and you had a great chose of words in this poem and that made it that much better. The emotion in this poem I can also tell was really great and all in all you did a great job and the only thing wrong would be punctuation but thats okay though. So good job and a 5/5 from me. |