>>WOW - you are deffinatly improving with each poem. this is amazing - i love your choice od words and they way you have worded each line. i think 1 maybe 2 lines are a tad long for my liking that upsets the flow - the rhythem you have going on but to be honest its not really that noticable and when said aloud, its a very well put together poem.<<

Nice work.

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