by Italian Stallion Jun 17, 2009
category :
Life, society /
other
While hard at work, craving his addiction, |
by Nobody
I really liked it though flow was great, my dad has chewed for years one of his many addictions i have a new perspective of his addiction chewing is disgusting though....but thank you for this piece i found it interesting and it hit home i find myself writing alot of my poems about addictions of many kinds, so i really enjoyed it 5/5 keep up the writing |
I wont leave a extremely long comment or anything but want to let you know you did a awesome job with the challenge Jen and I gave you. You wrote about two people with the same addction of chewing tobacco. You did great with the emotions and feelings these people go through, how they long to have that chewing tobacco, the effects of it and how it makes them happy and releases their stress, and how it makes them feel. Anyone addicted to something would feel like its a way of releasing their stress and how it fills them with happiness. You captured this very nicely, I like the little challenge [if there even is one haha.. it was pretty straight forward] of figuring out what youre talking about here. But nonetheless you really did a great job and I'm proud of you. You took up the challenge and got an A+. |