Naive *contest poem*

by David Paul   Jun 17, 2009


A raspy sorting of words and feeling,
Long staring into artistic ceilings,
One thousand pictures worth just one more word,
Entitled through thoughtless verbs.
Anticipation.
The lives that paint loves lust and lies,
Forced unity toward the starless skies.
Dictation.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I love this piece, you did such a wonderful job. Although it was short, you captured the reader and held their attention until the end. Very well-penned, good luck with the contest! Take care and keep writing, always and forever..

    ~MaryAnne

  • 15 years ago

    by Corruption

    This is a great piece of work
    i am glad to of read it :)
    the part...
    "The lives that paint loves lust and lies,
    Forced unity toward the starless skies."
    was absolutely beautiful
    it was my favourite part
    although i reread the poem about 6 times, no lie...
    the artistic ceiling part i thought was very clever too
    i did not understand it totally but
    it sounded quite nice to the ears and well looked nice to the ears :)

    good job :)

    Keenan

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