I would love to hear this song sung even though these lyrics stand on there own music always add a bit to it

I like it

For your first song it was great. I'd love to see the melody along with this, although I've already created one in my head. I like how you also named the sections because a lot of people never do that, this way it seems more professional. nice job
5.5

I wish I knew the music to this, but even so, I enjoyed the words and the meaning, im sure it sounds fantastic as well! great job!

Beautiful. I love the repetition in each stanza, but the chorus was the best part for me. I'd love to hear this sung hahah. One part bothered me though. In II, second line: "And pathways ahead you, are not there to last" I think it would sound better if you added an 'of' after 'ahead' or maybe change it to 'aheada' if you know what I'm trying to say. I would say the comma is not needed as well. And for III, I would've liked it more if it kept with the rhyming scheme, but other than that, I loved it. I could just read it over and over. You should sing it =] well done.

What a beautiful song you have made:)

I especially liked the chorus:

I was swept away of the journey that has long since begun
I know you won't take long to arrive, (uncertainty is gone)
Whatever is in your past and whatever we may have done (?)
Here at the shore where promises were made, we'll sail as one

To sail as one indeed...this is how true love should be, to sail away together and overcome all things from our past...

A much beautiful work, I am glad I read it:)

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

I'd reallly like to hear this sung as you you intended.. I think the emotion in the piece would be conveyed much more when sung :)
well written piece

You can really feel the love :) it made me think about my girlfriend hehe

Though the best part is the Chorus..

Well Done :)

5/5

Absolutely beautiful! I loved your song. What a enjoyable piece!

I was swept away of the journey that has long since begun
I know you won't take long to arrive, (uncertainty is gone)
Whatever is in your past and whatever we may have done (?)
Here at the shore where promises were made, we'll sail as one

I especially loved the chorus of your song...it is very romantic and flows beautifully! a wonderful write, I wish I could hear it in song!

This is really good, great actually. Even without the melody, it sings, for me, thats how you know its a good one. Like I said, great.

This is really good, great actually. Even without the melody, it sings, for me, thats how you know its a good one. Like I said, great.

This is really good, great actually. Even without the melody, it sings, for me, thats how you know its a good one. Like I said, great. :D