by Kaila Jun 18, 2009
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
Eyes that hold secrets stare at me. |
by H E Losey
Again good words but now the picture is lacks continuity. The reader is jerked from scene to scene with no connections. Left me with no idea of where you were going. |
This is a boring poem with zero emotion. It's basically a cliche ontop of cliche ontop of cliche. Unoriginal in every way. |
by The Queen
Hmm..Indeed another cute piece from you. I love the transparency in this poem that way it made me easier to imagine the scene that you tried to portray. Good job. |
I really enjoyed reading this poem |