I really love this original style. I was also how you managed to use such beautiful words appropriately in a poem of this theme

I cannot find anything to criticize in negative way
in this poem

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Mmmmm, the title reminds me of Daniel Craig. ;)
Nice one! Hahhh.

First off I love how when you first glance at the poem it looks promising, it looks different. The structure is quite unique, and adds strength to a readers first impression-
which is sometimes the most important one.

"Defiance - the hunger of survival."
`Good idea sort of defining in the title within the first line, it helps the reader understand the poem as the read on much more clearly.

"recycled"
`Loved how you used that word, woah.

"......Persecuted
..........Faithful
.............Murdered."
`One thing I'd like to suggest is to refer back to the opening stanza if you're going to repeat a word such as murdered. Instead of "faithful" use "followed" like you did before, or I'd prefer if you were to use "faithful" in both cases. It just adds so much strength and when you only repeat one word it sort of goes overlooked.

You managed to keep a really nice, solid flow.
Which can prove hard when you use such a broad base of vocab. Nicely done.

The final stanza was by far my favourite.
Just wow.
Its the first time I've seen long sentences, a paragraph, create such a tense tone for the reader. Such darkness in the words you've chosen, they all fit perfectly.

Good work-
it blew my mind.

Joe! I absolutely love this piece.

I agree with Lisa, right away I looked at this poem (thought of Daniel Craig. :P) and knew it was going to be something different, interesting. I love the structure you went with here. Very effective for the topic of choice, I think. (;

In the first line, I really like how you separated the words followed and murdered by the period. It finalizes it, in away? There's more of a boom! Hit-you-hard sort of effect. Nice work on that.

In this bit:
"A community of hearts
...torn apart
......Persecuted
..........Faithful
.............Murdered."

I think using Followed in place of Faithful would have been more effective. It goes back to the first line; it would make that strong point, of what these people went through, all over again.

I did like the periods used for longer pauses. It gave the statement/word before more time to sink in. In that space of a second or two, you have so much more time to think about what was said, and it gets to you.

Overall, very powerful write. It'll be heading straight to my favorites, I think. You did such a good job. I'd love to pick out my favorite lines to show you, but I can't! They're all so full of meaning and brilliance.

Keep it up! (:

Woweeeee! Joe, this piece is amazing. (: The entire poem kept me engaged, and tense. You did a great job of choosing your words: each one certainly did it's job, and held power.

"Defiance - the hunger of survival."
^Thought this was a fabulous opening to the work, as it's a straight jab to the face, haha. Couldn't have set the tone better, really tugs the reader in.

"Individual hunger lingers in the depths of the woods;
searching for shelter, hunting for food - voracious."
^Loved this bit! You created such a vivid scene, and portrayed the avid and desperate hunger of these people well. I also like that you didn't detail the 'food,' leaving it open to mean literal and spiritual provision.

"......Persecuted
..........Faithful
.............Murdered."
^I really liked your use of 'faithful' here, because I was expecting to see 'followed' as used in the previous stanza. A good shock, adding a new thought.

The rest of this just continues to be amazing, heh. Your vocabulary, the ebb and flow, the meaning behind it all: seriously well written! This deserves to be nominated. (:

Hi! Joe,
You chose a very difficult and controversial topic with Defiance. What with the doubters and unbelievers out there.
I think this poem is probably the best of yours I have read to date. It is concise, filled with feeling, graphic and gets the message across.
In my life time I have had the privlege of having an Uncle who was in Belsen who had lost all his family in the Polish Concentration camps, his parent, brothers, sisters and many other relations not to mention friends. He became a Rabbi and he was a man that everybody loved as he made time for all not only those of his own religion. He is still my hero, he got on with his life and gave thanks that he was still alive and lived his life as he said to me one day, 'for his family and friends who had died in the camps'. Man's inhumanity, especially caused by those who were members of the Germans Einsatzgruppen guards and workers never ceases to make me sick in the stomach with remorse. The Germans of the camps must be rotting in hell now as to turn people against their own the way they did with the Einsatzgruppen must be one of the most deadliest of sins.
Sorry I digress a Great Poem though it is sad that we can write about such. Yet important that we remember the holocaust and pray that we never permit it to happen again. 5/5
Unfortunately man is as unpredictable as the life we have and since those harrowing years he has seen fit to attempt to cleanse other people several times, Europe and Africa are examples. Ray S

This poem was absolutely amazingly written -one of which I can only truly praise. You really summed up the Holocaust in your words; not only what it was but also the emotion was there as well. The only thing that I saw a change that needed to be made was 'defining worlds humanity;' - I think an apostrophe is needed in worlds. Other than that very well done, an impressive write. A huge topic, and I loved the way you executed your thoughts and ideas into a poem.

Brilliant :]
5/5.

A very well spoken truth about the Holocaust and the evil nature of man.

"The massacres evolve...with ravenous games,
while the chambers of hell extend regular flames."

I learned in a class about the Holocaust that there are five stages in the scale of prejudice: Antilocution, Avoidance, Discrimination, Physical Harm, and Extermination. The hatred evolves to more severe crimes of humanity.

I also liked the line:

"a distinguished existence now altered"

The hatred of one man fueled the inhumane aspects of a nation aimed to relinquish another.

I often imagine if Hitler had used his oratory skills for a good purpose, he might've changed the world in a positive way.

It shows that man can be defiant to himself/ herself.

5/5

"Defiance - the hunger of survival."

I really like how you defined your title, this was a strong opening line, very well worded.

Right away when I first looked at this piece, I could tell it was going to be different in a good way, I love the structure, it strengthens this piece.

"Followed. Murdered.
The tidings of intelligent activity (derailed; recycled.)
Individual hunger lingers in the depths of the woods;
searching for shelter, hunting for food - voracious."

Wow, I have never read a poem like this before. Your wording blows me away and is so descriptive. Such a vivid scene you have created in front of my eyes, and your vocabulary is deep and intense, truly explained all that's going on.

"A community of hearts
...torn apart
......Persecuted
..........Faithful
.............Murdered."

I liked what you did here with the periods, this was very unique and had a nice touch. This was well-written too, what powerful words.

"The massacres evolve...with ravenous games,
while the chambers of hell extend regular flames.
Survival amongst death despite endless starvation,
they fight for their lives; God's faithful creation."

Your words speak such a horrible truth, you expressed the terror and evil well, and how the people are striving to live, though its harder than ever. Wonderful job so far.

"There's freedom sought with...

pride,
...courage,
......and hope

defining worlds humanity;"

I like the originality portrayed here, excellent job so far. So much meaning is held in your words in every line.

"Adversary: artificial pursuit arranged, scouted then degaged,
the Einsatzgruppen hunted, laughing at the pleasure they gained.
Slaughtering house - chambered then gassed or lined and executed,
an distinguished existence now altered: described as "The Holocaust."

Wow, you have described so much hate and the whole horror and sickness of the Holocaust. To think that these evil people killed for the pleasure just sends a sickening want for revenge in your heart. Well-written, you have summed up all the terror in your own words and managed to blew me away.

5/5 from me, a brilliant and powerful write.

~MaryAnne

For sure going on my favorites.