The Connection

Yet again I am surprised that out of the 300 plus people who read your poem only three others besides me voted for it? It seems ironical to me that a poem of this calibre with such imagery could not open them up to tell you just how good it is, still that s life as a poet .
I gave you 5/5 for your excellent poem Ray S all I want to say is in the other comments.

Opalescent
Eyes that haunt
Skinless shivers
Lips that taunt

Spellbound mind
Naked soul
Running wild
Yet in control

Fingers trace
Awakened skin
The hungry mask
Of nature's sin

This pounding (I think it would sound better if you said Relentless pounding
Deep inside her chest Inside her chest
Spoke volumes Spoke volumes
On all held suppressed On all supressed
to keep in line with the not using too many filler words as you did in the other stanzas)

Freedom called
Her ache profound
I longed to free
What others bound

A kiss explodes
As lips collide
The hunger freed
Won't be denied

Bodies twist
Into the night
Two wrongs melded
Born one right

The flow and rhythm are great! It is rhymed perfectly, not forced with inversion or just picking any old word just as long as it rhymes. The piece is thought provoking and clever. I love the way the combination of the short syllable lines with just the right amount of fillers sounds when read aloud. I also like the articulate word choice, use of metaphors and vivid imagery. Never disappointed with your unique way of writing about topics many can relate to. Nice job!

I love it Jenn :)
At first it gave me such a warm feeling in the inside..and yet you ended it beautifully!
Great work, as usual :)

"Freedom called
Her ache profound
I longed to free
What others bound"
^My fave line here :) thank you!

This is such a good write honey.
Keep it up~

"Opalescent
Eyes that haunt
Skinless shivers
Lips that taunt"

A stunning opening that grabs the reader's attention and holds it there.

"Spellbound mind
Naked soul
Running wild
Yet in control"

Here and in the rest of this piece there is a flawless flow that is so smooth, and perfect rhyming, that is not forced. Excellent descriptions here that tell the reader so much.

"Fingers trace
Awakened skin
The hungry mask
Of nature's sin"

Love the wording here, this stanza was well-written as all the others, and you portrayed much imagery.

"This pounding
Deep inside her chest
Spoke volumes
On all held suppressed"

Wow, it seriously just gets better and better. Lovely write so far, Beautiful Chaos.

"Freedom called
Her ache profound
I longed to free
What others bound"

Not much more I can say, I am running out of words. Wonderful wonderful job.

"A kiss explodes
As lips collide
The hunger freed
Won't be denied"

Just the thought of "a kiss explodes" sends so much imagery into my mind, and I thought it was very well-penned. I would have never thought to say that. I also like "lips collide" how sweet.

"Bodies twist
Into the night
Two wrongs melded
Born one right"

The ending was beyond perfect, describing how "bodies twist" is so romantic. I like how you mention "two wrongs melded, born one right". How true and heartfelt your words are.

5/5 from me, I admire your poetry so much.

Keep writing, always and forever...

~MaryAnne