A Blind Melody

The title was superb. Really.

First off, I can't say I was a fan of the flow/structure of this one. It felt so forced, the reader couldn't enjoy the sentence before the next one was upon me, yknow? It was all very blunt, not creating a image. You have a very good vocab, maybe just try use it more sparingly. I agree with Temps there.

Also punctuation wise you went a little overboard.
Read the poem out loud and fit the punctuation where it really fits, it doesn't have to be at the end of each sentence.

The poem over all though wasn't bad,
the idea behind it was beautiful I just think you need to bring more grace to it.

Good write though. (:

I love your word choice and rhythm and rhyme of this blind melody with sensual imagery
I would not change a thing

well done!

Sounds like you were using a thesaurus throughout the whole thing.. I dont know about this honestly, personally I thought maybe you should have broken it up a bit cause it didnt flow that nice for me - maybe thats cause Ive only read it once. I thought you wrote a good poem here but maybe got a bit carried away with your word choice. Other than that nice job.

Temps.

This poem is fantastic.
it such a lovely piece to read. you have an excellent way with words. This poem really captured my attention from the beginning,
i truly enjoyed reading it.
well done
5/5

I liked this one quite abit for late night reading, i'm sure i could say more at a better hour than 2:30 am but all in all, I like it. 4/5