Rain

"The sky opens and the rain falls
To me a guiding light
That lets me know through all my sorrow
Things will be alright"

First line- This wasn't the most eye-catching opening line, it was a tad bit cliche and not descriptive enough. People all the time say "the rain falls". I didn't really feel this first line, try to be more creative and give off more imagery.

Second line- Reword for better understanding to this: "Straight to me, a guiding light". It will read much better and flow too.

Third line- This line was too long in wording and ruined the flow. Change to this: "Reminding me through the sorrow"

Fourth line- This was good, I feel like rain really gives off hope, its such a beautiful miracle from God.

"Although our tears are different
The sky's so pure and plain
Mine are filled with salt
And all my hidden pain"

This was good, the flow here was almost flawless but I didn't feel like the second line fit to well. Are you saying then that the rain is so clear and pure and your tear are unclear? It was a little hard to grasp here.

"Neither will last forever
for soon the sun will shine
leaving behind the remnants
of something so divine"

My favorite stanza, perfect flow and rhyme. Nothing was forced and your words speak of such truth. The rain can't last forever, and it truly is divine. Excellent stanza!

"I'll put up with the rain
In order for the rainbow to appear
Because I know once the tears have passed
A bright future will be clear"

Third line was too long maybe reword to this:

"Because once the tears pass".

Fourth line- I feel like "bright" was not the best word, maybe use a more descriptive and non-cliche word.

Overall, 4/5 from me, I do feel like this poem had potential but there are a lot of spots where you could touch up.

Take care and God Bless You!

~MaryAnne