The poem started off strong and then tapered towards the ending. I think in the first few stanzas the images provided in the wording allowed the reader to see what you wanted them too. However the repetition of words began to detract from the poem. There was strong emotion that helped carry this portion but there still felt like something was missing. I believe that the middle portions of the poem not wavered in strength then the ending might not have ended in such an abrupt manner. Though the poem was good, I would suggest some revision and see if you can make the rest of the poem have the same impact as the first two stanzas. 4/5.