I really liked this one. but then again i like all your stuff.
the only thing i didnt like was this part

so please see me and set my mind free...
the smoke will fade...
but I never should have
stayed...

i dont think it flowed or fit well.
but other than that it was realllllllllly good
5/5
:D

Wow that's awesome =O

Amazing poem, love the format of it too.

5/5 =)

Ii absolutely love this :)