You asked me what I wanted?

Very cute! 5/5! :)

Very lovely. A very truthful love poem.

Awwwww I really like the direction this poem goes in! Your heart is definitely in the right place!

But yeah, it was a little too direct and that could make it lose its meaning, which would be a damn shame seeing as you're so sincere with it. As everyone else has said, maybe switch up the words you use and how they're arranged but other than that, very nice read. =)

Overall, I really liked this poem. It was heartfelt and very emotional. I think it could of been a little better written to make the reader feel the poem and have a deeper meaning. For example, the first stanza, I think would be better written like this:

(If you could have anything; what would it be?)
Gazing, pondering, I thought you could see,
all I've ever wanted was you on one knee -
to take my hand and marry me.

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overall nice write, keep up the great work.

Peace, Joe

"You asked me if I could have anything what would it be?
I looked and looked away as I thought that you could already see,
That what I want is you going down on one knee,
To to take my hand and marry me."

First line: Place a comma after "anything".

This is a cute stanza, you obvisouly want to take your relationship another step, have a life committment.

"So we can be together from now until forever,
Smile knowing we promised we would leave each other never,
And we will always be there through any stormy weather,
Just me and you fighting this world together."

This is so touching, I hope your wish comes true! My only suggestion would be in the second line, it would read better if reworded to this:

"Knowing we would leave each other never,"

"So you asked me what I wanted,
And here I stand before you,
Are you going to make me happy,
And make your girls dreams come true?"

"girls" should be "girl's".

Otherwise, this was a short but meaningful piece of your dream to spend eternity with the one you love. Excellent emotions and wording. Take care and have a good week.

~MaryAnne