This was truly beautiful, everything about it was so deep and entrancing. My only suggestion would be about this second line:

"Closing skies eyes for us,"

I didn't really like the "skies eyes" part, it didn't read well for me and kind of threw me off.

Maybe change to "Closing the eye of the sky for us," or something else. This is just my opinion though.

Otherwise, well-penned, this was an enjoyable and original piece to read. Keep writing, always and forever...

~MaryAnne